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Imperial Monarche
06-05-2005, 01:59 AM
This is just to have some fun. Take a scene and re-write some of the dialogue (or, all for that matter) to make it your way or silly. Take this for example:

INT.- CORUSCANT OPERA HOUSE
Palpatine stares at the entertainment before him, Anakin sitting silently at his side. Palptine turns to Anakin and then looks forward again before he speaks.


PALPATINE

Have you ever heard the story of Darth

Plagus the Wise?


ANAKIN

You mean that one guy that grew so powerful

in the dark side that he was able to manipulate

the midichlorians so that they would create life

there by making him able to save people from dying

and then his apprentice killed him in his sleep after

he told him all of his powers. Why? You know him?

Palpatine gets a smug and disappointed look on his face.


PALPATINE

Nevermind...


You guys try it out.

Bacta Beast
06-05-2005, 04:05 PM
I've always wanted to see Star Wars on Mystery Science theater.

DarthAngel
06-05-2005, 07:18 PM
Int: Utupa - Seperatist Council Chamber

Grevious has just disembarked from his shuttle and scurried off to talk with Darth Sidious.

DS: General Grevious move the seperatist leaders to mustafar.

GG: You know I am getting a little sick of being your errand boy.

DS: SILENCE MONKEY BOY! The war is almost over, I'll be done with you soon.

GG: Thank God...but what about Dooku?

DS: His death was a necessary loss. Soon I will have a new apprentice. One far younger and more powerf...He'll be an improvement from you and Dooku, but he's certainly no Darth Maul.

Hologram fades out, and Grevious walks away dejected.

sith_killer_99
06-05-2005, 07:55 PM
Anakin vs. Dooku

Palpatine: Good, now kill him Anakin.

Dooku (looking towards Palpatine): Lord Sidious NO, do not let him kill me! (Looking up to Anakin) I have been betrayed by my Sith Master!

Anakin: (looking towards Palpatine): You're the Sith Lord we have been looking for!

Palpatine: What, who me? Nah. Now kill Count Dooku and be done with it boy, my patients wears thin!

Anakin: Oh, you mean this is another lie by Count Dooku to plant seeds of doubt in my young Jedi mind!

Palpatine: Yes, that's what I mean, you see how dangerous he is! Now kill him quickly before he can spread any more, um, lies, yes that's it.

Anakin: I shouldn't.

Palpatine: Do it, and your journey towards the darkside....Um, nevermind, just kill him.

Anakin: Um, OK. If you're sure it's the right thing to do.

sith_killer_99
06-05-2005, 08:25 PM
Palpatine: Have you ever heard the story of Darth Plagus the wise?

Anakin: No.

Palpatine: He was a Sith Lord who became so powerful that he was able manipulate the Midi-Chlorians to create life. As with anyone who gains power his only fear was losing that power, which of course he did. But, he passed on the knowledge to his apprentice. Unfortunatly his apprentice never became powerful enough to re-produce the technique. There has only been one who was powerful enough to create life. That life, was you Anakin. Darth Plagus was your Father, and I was his apprentice.

Anakin: You knew my father!

Palpatine: Yes, I was once a Sith Lord, the same as your father.

Anakin: I wish I had known him.

Palpatine: He was a good friend, and an Evil Sith. You must learn the ways of the Darkside, if you are to rule the Galaxy with me!

Anakin: I can't rule the Galaxy, I got work to do, it's so big.

Palpatine: That's Obi-Wan talking.

Anakin: Obi-Wan. How am I ever going to explain this to him.

Palpatine: Learn about the Darkside.

Anakin: I gotta get back to the temple, it's late, I'm in for it as it is. Look, I can hide the fact that you're and evil Lord of the Sith, or whatever.

Palpatine: You must do what you feel is right of course.

DARKLORD_67
06-05-2005, 11:32 PM
This is a TERRIFIC thread, I must say!!!!

All of you guys (Sith killer 99, darth angel, et al) are really TALENTED writers.

Very, Very well done guys!!! BEst of luck to you, and very best regards,

Mr. JabbaJohnL
06-06-2005, 11:11 AM
CORUSCANT - PADMÉ'S APARTMENT - INTERIOR - NIGHT

Anakin and Padmé are standing at the balcony while Padmé brushes her hair.

Padmé: I was thinking of going early to fix up the baby's room.

Anakin: You're so . . . beautiful.

Padmé: Only because I'm so in love.

Anakin: No, it's because I'm so in love with you. Wait, did I just say that? Man, I sound like an idiot! :crazed:

rust
06-07-2005, 10:49 PM
Invisible Hand, after Obi was rescued

Ani: Master, How's your back?
Obi: Broken.

Mr. JabbaJohnL
06-08-2005, 05:13 PM
Anakin and Padmé are reunited after a long time of not seeing each other.

Padmé: Something wonderful has happened. Ani, I'm pregnant.
Anakin: So . . . we can still have sex tonight, right?

seanmcfripp
06-12-2005, 11:52 AM
This one's cheating a bit, but what the hay...

*Anakin has just beheaded Count Dooku*

Anakin: That's not the way to get ahead in life.
Palpatine: No, it isn't.

Anakin: If only he'd been more headstrong.
Palpatine: Yes.

Anakin: He'll never be the head of a major corporation.
Palpatine: No, he won't.

Anakin: Not a good time to lose one's head.
Palpatine: Ok, that's enough.

Mr. JabbaJohnL
06-12-2005, 01:22 PM
This one's cheating a bit, but what the hay...

*Anakin has just beheaded Count Dooku*

Anakin: That's not the way to get ahead in life.
Palpatine: No, it isn't.

Anakin: If only he'd been more headstrong.
Palpatine: Yes.

Anakin: He'll never be the head of a major corporation.
Palpatine: No, he won't.

Anakin: Not a good time to lose one's head.
Palpatine: Ok, that's enough.
Because "he was an unarmed prisoner" wasn't bad enough already. ;)

VaderhitsJarjar
06-12-2005, 02:59 PM
Episode I

Qui-Gon - Jar jar I think it is best for you to stay here on Tatooine and watch after Anni's mother.

Jar Jar - looks down - aww meesoo gonna miss being bombad jedi friend but meesa promissus to not lets anni's mother down -

Jar jar trips walking away.

Later - Obi Wan Master did he fall for it?

Qui-Gon - Yes he is gone I was getting sick of his breath.

Ok ok so that was a bit out of sequence

Qui-Long Gone
06-24-2005, 09:40 PM
At the Coruscant Medical Center.

Version 1, early draft....

Sideous: Lord Vader can you hear me?

Vader: (breathing) Whattt....you're breaking up....

Sideous: I said, can you hear me?

Vader: (vacant stare)

Sideous: (moves back) Can you hear me now?

Vader: (still blank)

Sideous: (moves further away) Can you hear me now?

Vader: (breaks straps with new bio hands and gives a thumbs up as he nods)

Sideous: Good....

(fade to Padme funeral scene)


Version 2, Second draft....

Sideous: Lord Vader, can you hear me?

Vader: Yes Master....

Sideous: Good. Um, they didn't have the helmet in a 7 1/2....

Vader: It's fine....

Sideous: (wringing his hands) And we could only get the boots in an 11 wide...

Vader: They're fine....

Sideous: Are you sure, cause we could go with a 12...

Vader: (looking blankly at the Sith master).

Sideous: Is the cape too much?

Vader: (still blank)

Sideous: (after a pause) What?

Vader: (begins to break his straps violently, wrestles free of operating table and takes his first steps in his new machine form....reaches left hand in Sideous' direction and begins to force choke him)